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Deviousness `anmari has been spreading her infectious positivity throughout our community for over 6 years. Throughout this time Ana has been at the core of all things devious, passionately developing an eclectic gallery, helping organise devmeets, participating in chat events and also recently completed dedicating her time as a Community Volunteer. We are absolutely delighted to bestow the Deviousness Award for May 2013 to `anmari, congratulations! Read More
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The negative thing about it is indeed that fact of your work being too technical, as if a maths nerd made it. The starts; why are they only in that particular area of the picture? it doesnt really look right to me, because even though stars on the sky are spread unevenly, too make them look more realistic on this picture, you shouldve maybe made them a bit tinier, more spread and put them all over they blue sky (bottom centre-right area + bottom left corner).
Also the colours of the sky dont quite seem right, you cant not notice the lighter and darker blue between the stars 'fighting' eachother for a little space. You maybe wanted to create an effect, as if the stars were lighting up the sky around them, but that just doesnt look realistic on this picture.
Now, good things! You must be good with your wee mmd software, because this guy really does look sad. His head and eyes are looking down, which looks perfect! The piece of hair floating somewhere in the air - fantastic. it really does look good. About the tear... well the tear itself looks good, but in my opinion it is a bit too big (just a tiny bit) and is put in a wrong place; its too far on the edge of the eye, if you look closely, where the tear actually is, is not even the eye anymore, it looks more like a make up to me, a drawn line with an eye liner. But as i already said - the tear itself is looking awesome and well done you for that. also, the idea to include it is good too.
To the moon! Thanks to you changing it a little bit, this critique will probably have more positive than negative points! Good! The moon is looking very good, its glowy, its the right size, its not blended with the background, its standing out, BUT it doesnt draw your attention away from the main character! Im impressed. Now that the moon isnt a white dot anymore, it really gave the picture some realism.
Overall, i really do the picture, its not "my piece of cake", but i appreciate it. The amount of work you put into it can be really seen. Well done
Now for Saix, you kept all of the wonderful details, from the original Organization coat to the fine details in his hair. I really like the way you made a breeze - making Saix's hair and the drawstrings on his coat flow out gently. This makes me feel cool all over just looking at this picture. The way you positioned Saix in the picture is just right, right in front of the moon and it gives you that perspective. The way Saix is smiling and crying sets the mood of the picture, and it made me warm inside.
I can go on blabbing about how beautiful this picture is. The detail and quality of the picture is amazing, but one thing you could improve on (well in my opinion) is making the stars in the sky a little more realistic. It looks to me as if some of the stars in the sky are sparkles. Never mind me if they ARE sparkles, but overall, I think that this is a very awe-inspiring picture. I had even been been thinking of using this as my desktop picture!
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